As if they know, they've left me low.
Caved in to breathe dark air to show
Though I insisted,
They never desisted,
And now I feel the agent grow.
Like manmade lava, thought subdued,
It creeps and spreads, so slow and crude;
Then burns every part of me,
If I so much as sense it free.
To set it free is
A Blasphemy.
I never thought my life's so short
By trifling with their troubles brought.
Though I acted,
Though distracted,
I feel the glass stretched thin and taut.
Corrupt advice: my only guide.
Liquids, powders, gas collide.
Intakes every part of me,
If I so much as hear it free.
To set it free is
A Blasphemy.
My battered paws fight blood-stained claws.
Might no one else confront the cause?
On hunting grounds
I hunt the sound
Of breathing from my open pores.
The flash itself deskins my eyes,
Dust before my body dies:
The fate of every part of me,
If I so much as see it free.
To set it free is
A Blasphemy.
Thoughts were never clashing, whether
Gnashing morals pained forever.
Feel your presence,
Taste my essence,
You'll kill me first, or we together.
A gush of oil, liquid coal
It starts consuming coloured soul.
Will coat every part of me,
If I so much as touch it free.
To set it free is
A Blasphemy.
"So our battle's waged to the seventh day.
You may not feel or walk that way.
For you or I
Will surely die -
We'll see which side shall pass away..."
Ceres can't resist the Earth.
We don't think Hell could be much worse.
Nothing left of you or me
If I so much as taste it free.
To set it free is
A Blasphemy.
(Copyright 2006 © Matthew Ainge)















Comments
My battered paws fight blood-stained claws.
Might no one else confront the cause?
On hunting grounds
I hunt the sound
Of breathing from my open pores.
I can see how unforced this rhyme is because three rhymes aren't even visual rhymes - claws, cause, pores - and I go all gooey over technical things like that.
This would make an amazing epic. Occasionally your phrasing becomes a bit heavy, but that can be forgiven because it's poetry and the topic isn't that light. But overall a fantastic poem!
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The verse you picked out happens to be my favourite too.
Steal away, my friend. The structure has a tribal rhythm to it that I loved when I first completed it and realised it might actually work. I was worried it might sound too much like a collection of limericks, but metre sorted that I think.
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